1.) The first sentence is a bit awkward, should be shorter and make more of an impact.
The topic is well established and the reader is informed what the paper will be about.
2.) The thesis statement is unclear to the reader.
3.) The paper is well structured, and the main points are clearly listed. Each paragraph is relevant to the introduction and thesis.
4.)For the most part the essay is clear except for the explanation of an absolute monarchy in the third paragraph, and the last couple sentences stray off topic.
5.) No sources were cited.
6.) The greatest strength is probably vocabulary. Good word choices
1.) My peer editor and I agree that the structure of the introduction lacks substance.
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3.) I disagree with my peer editor about the main points for the body. I think they are well listed and clear to the reader.
4.) I agree with my peer editor that the grammar and spelling are good, although improvements can be made especially in the third paragraph.
5.) I disagree with my peer editor about the paper listing the sources clearly. Only once did I give a page number.
6.) My peer editor and I both agree that my strong point is grammar.